User blog comment:Rocket Slug/Good Beginning For A New Story?/@comment-113335-20100313011334

A decent, followable introduction. It needs variance in sentance structure, but you're doing good. -- † TurtleShroom™! Jesus Loves You and Died for You!! †    :)  :) You shall build a Turtle Fence. † 01:13, March 13, 2010 (UTC)